OK, so it's an ascending number of syllables per line... from one up to ten... then back again to one.
I hope I've not messed this up and that it actually does look like a pyramid. [With my computer skills, it'll probably just look like a potato, but never mind...] Β
"INMATE GUILTY"
[1] Fat.
[2] Moist soul.
[3] Much too tired.
[4] Bloated conscience.
[5] Please cease that talking.
[6] They can't stop the buzzing.
[7] Time to break out of this cell.
[8] Bleak memories? Still chasing me.
[9] So I'll keep running 'til my feet bleed.
[1O] Breathtaking pain leaking from my dark soul.
[9] I see him, grinning, in my mind's eye.
[8] Burn him from the face of the Earth.
[7] You can't? You're no good to me.
[6] So catch me if you can.
[5] Howling at the moon.
[4] Until sunrise.
[3] All is calm.
[2] And then?
[1] Fin.
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This is so awesome and creative man! Definitely looks like a pyramid.
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Thank you so much… very kind. π
Haha I (sort of) fell into the pyramid shape by accident, so it was a bit of luck, really!
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Definitely a pyramid to me! And a great post.
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Thank you, Mindfump; you’re most kind, as ever. π
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AWESOME! βοΈa bit in Oscar Wilde style (impression). I think he’d enjoy it haha
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Really? Haha, that’s a nice thought. π Thankyou Ray. π
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I like this. I might try something similar…but mine inevitably will involve swearwords and be less beautiful ππ
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Most kind. π
Haha, well I’m sure yours will be just as if not more beautiful… and I’d rather hope there will be swearwords[!]
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Lol ππ
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Awesome!!!
Check out my blog also to experience the magic of letters
Hope you will like it π
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Thank you so much… I’ll definitely go have a look thru your blog ASAP. π
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Yes, a sideways pyramid. Interesting… π
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oops hit enter too quickly. ha ha! this is sublime. I love it. I want to try it. Is it something you made up?
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Haha, I wasn’t quite sure what to make of the first comment! π
Thankyou Daisy, that’s most kind. I’m glad you liked it. I essentially just made it up, really, but I’m sure lots of people have done something similar… the hardest part certainly was getting the line lengths correct(!)
I hope you do try it, when you’re in a pyramid-y mood: it’d be great to see what you come up with. π
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Ah cheers – I will put on ‘walk like an Egyptian’ by the Bangles for inspiration. Great piece.
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And now I must go to YouTube… everyone seems to be talking ’80s music today. π
Thank you again, kind lady. π
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And… now I want French Fries π
Seriously though, you are incredibly creative. Glad to be following along here.
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Very kind, Gabe, very kind. π
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